Springboro
hometown girl
quiet, quaint, small
pretty simple, not much to her
claimed to be boring
but no one ever leaves
an Ohioan
buckeye lover
slow moving, takes her time
lives in the suburbs
cookie cutter house
works at the school, where everyone knows everyone
too small to keep secrets
has a simple view of the world, lives in a bubble
doesn't argue much, relaxed, laid back
interacts with the same people all the time
wishes for bigger things but,
never wants to leave.
happy with the relaxed life she lives
part of history, the Underground Railroad
helpful, part of the community
proud of her small town
comes alive in the fall, such a beautiful time
one track mind, not very adventurous- but still wishes
she can leave
stuck in between two larger cities
stuck in between wanting to stay, and wanting to get out
conflicted with oneself, sometimes fearful
proud to be a panther, but sometimes wants more
- The way I wrote this poem was I just thought of my hometown as a person. I also think it was helpful when I read the other poems posted on the prompt. I was trying to make it as person like as possible but still come across as a place.
I really liked your personification. I was able to relate to it a lot because it was pretty similar to mine and to my home town. You did a great job of describing Springsboro through a person and really capturing what Springsboro was all about. I was able to understand that your hometown is small and suburban. Everyone there knows everyone which is great, but they also want to branch out and get to know more people and live out there dreams. Your person seems to have a lot of pride in her hometown though so it is hard for her to leave. I liked the way your personification was set up as well. It really helped separate your ideas and descriptions. so yah, I really enjoyed reading your personification! keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteJen,
ReplyDeleteI like how you wrote this as a list of characteristics that reads like a poem. One of my favorite parts of this personification is the feeling of tension that you've created, a restlessness for something more that is never fully explored, yet never goes away. You've managed to give a sense of getting into someone's head, only we're getting into the head of a place. The lines about wishing for other things, but never leaving, or being called boring by outsiders, yet nobody ever leaves, really bring the tension into focus. The note about her being between two larger cities further highlights this tension, because that temptation is literally always on the horizon. You write that she is "too small to keep secrets," which is a great image because you are talking about the town being small, but have embodied that idea in someone who is literally too small too hold secrets, especially since she knows everyone. Great work!